Hey Kaitlyn, I thought your story was very interesting. I like all the names your characters had. I also like when you told parts of his childhood and described how everything felt. You had a few grammar errors but everything else is really great. Keep up the great work Kaitlyn!
Hi Kordell, I thought your story was fascinating. I especially like when he finds friends on the way to his journey to find his father. You had some spelling errors but it was really good. Gary’s mom must have a really hard time. Keep up the great work!